[CONTINUE + 2] Week 1 || Act: mingle

[foundationmods]

Monday comes onto the snowy town once more, though it still looks as if it's 'night' as ever.

Then again, you are underground. That's just to be expected, considering no natural light can get down here in the first place. The Monsters around you are just as friendly as ever, despite this being your third 'time' trying this monday.

There doesn't seem to be many Monsters here...or at least, you think there was more before? Huh.

Well, whatever.

You still have a mission - And with two trials under your belt, you're now a little closer to figuring things out.

...How much longer will this repeat?

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[ugly_split_ends]

Hm.... I wonder if that'll work. Two issues. One is less important: just that the fact there are point of view swaps at all was meant to be a secret. Since it literally starts from Yamanishi's introduction to her life at the academy, the fact it switches at all is already upending the "rules" of the story. If I switched earlier, I'd have to reveal that I was setting up their expectations in order to cruelly, cruelly betray them. Hehehehe.

[A little big of hissing-like giggling from Touko.]

Two, is that I want the audience to come to their own conclusions about Sora and decide if they like him or not. Whether he's genuine when he talks about his girlfriend and is faking it, or not. Also for the reader to wonder if the story is really going to be so cliched as to focus on "He has feelings for his sensei, but that's so taboo~" and that's the whole conflict. I mean, it is a part of the story, but the conflict goes beyond that.

The first thing Sora's point of view hits you with is he's genuinely a good person who believes in Yamanishi. I want to give the reader room to doubt that anyone can really be that good... especially when I presented Nishigawa as a potential other suitor.

[moonlightalter]

Hmm...that's a good point.

What about the confrontation where Sora shoves Nishigawa to the ground? The POV could switch just before he bursts in the door, and it could show Sora coming across his former-girlfriend crying. Then we could see him getting the information from her first-hand, as well as him dragging her off to see Yamanishi. And then we could see him punching Nishigawa from his point of view.

[ugly_split_ends]

Hee hehe... is that what you thought happened? Sorry. Truth is, Sora saw her text and then texted his ex-girlfriend "Get to this room... now." --Something like that, at least. There's no time for him to go and find her. Otherwise there'd be no scuffle between them. No delay before other teachers came to find them.

He really was a bit of an impulsive idiot. Just flew in there and let himself attack a teacher. Luckily for him, it worked out.