Hm.... I wonder if that'll work. Two issues. One is less important: just that the fact there are point of view swaps at all was meant to be a secret. Since it literally starts from Yamanishi's introduction to her life at the academy, the fact it switches at all is already upending the "rules" of the story. If I switched earlier, I'd have to reveal that I was setting up their expectations in order to cruelly, cruelly betray them. Hehehehe.
[A little big of hissing-like giggling from Touko.]
Two, is that I want the audience to come to their own conclusions about Sora and decide if they like him or not. Whether he's genuine when he talks about his girlfriend and is faking it, or not. Also for the reader to wonder if the story is really going to be so cliched as to focus on "He has feelings for his sensei, but that's so taboo~" and that's the whole conflict. I mean, it is a part of the story, but the conflict goes beyond that.
The first thing Sora's point of view hits you with is he's genuinely a good person who believes in Yamanishi. I want to give the reader room to doubt that anyone can really be that good... especially when I presented Nishigawa as a potential other suitor.
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[A little big of hissing-like giggling from Touko.]
Two, is that I want the audience to come to their own conclusions about Sora and decide if they like him or not. Whether he's genuine when he talks about his girlfriend and is faking it, or not. Also for the reader to wonder if the story is really going to be so cliched as to focus on "He has feelings for his sensei, but that's so taboo~" and that's the whole conflict. I mean, it is a part of the story, but the conflict goes beyond that.
The first thing Sora's point of view hits you with is he's genuinely a good person who believes in Yamanishi. I want to give the reader room to doubt that anyone can really be that good... especially when I presented Nishigawa as a potential other suitor.